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I witnessed something sad happen last week to a friend in their home. First off, Avel, Avel's mom, and I were having a discussion about life, school, and just everything happening at the moment. We were just sitting in their living room discussing every topic possible. It was just a deep converstaion we started, I always feel comfortable enough, to where I can talk to them about anything I feel the need to discuss. But then, their money struggles came up, and I felt terrible knowing I couldn't help in anyway. I could hear the sadness in their voices, them trying not to make it noticeable, while talking about the depressing topic. It just showed how much they struggle to go through just to make up for the bills they need to pay. I couldn't bare say another word or sit through this without doing anything.  Last, but not least the look in their eyes they gave off made it seem like they weren't going to make it through another week of bills. I just wish I could of helped in anyway, with anything, but I felt useless. I still hope and pray that one day in the future I can come visit Avel and help his mom out with as much as I can. 

 

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I believe parents should never spank their children. First, off parents spanking can lead to aggression towards children. For example, studies show how children love to imitate those they love and respect. Another example, studies show is that spanking may make them act out more in the long run. Also spanking your children can lead to fear and resentment towards people. For example, research studies have found that 40-50 percent of people, when asked how they felt when spanked, reported they "hated their parent". Another example, is that studies show how fear and resentment keep them from wanting to change their behavior and from learning how to do so. Finally, parents should not spank their children because in the end, it can lead to child abuse. For example, studies show how 85-90 percent of child abuse were attempts to discipline, but in the end got out of control. Another study shows how, spanking after anger can be likely to lead to emotional, mental and physical damage towards the child. So in the end as you see how big of an effect spanking can,be towards a child, why do it?